Sick of NaNo already?

[oloriel]

The first chapter is finished and up. Yes, it's Friends Only. If you wish to read, friend livingshapes, and if I know who you are (which is likely, because why else should you want to read it?), I'll just friend you back. I'm just kind of shy about this project (yes, although I keep talking of it), so I'd like to know just how many people have reading access. ... yeah. Does that make sense? No? Sorry.

9,575 / 50,000 (19.1%)

16 pages and almost a week. For one chapter.
I have no idea what happens from now on. I hope it'll come to me soon, because I'm already way behind on my quota.

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[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

*HUGS*
Speedwriting isn't the thing for some people, so don't feel bad if you don't make it.

The chapter is up? At LivingShapes? Friend me, please?

[oloriel.livejournal.com]

Done!

*hugs right back* Yeah. I think I'm not made for this sort of thing. I tend to think about phrases and stuff too much. I haven't even proof-read the whole thing now, because that would probably result in starting over again. *sighs* Oh well.

Good to hear that your story is coming along well, at any rate!

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

As for now, I found the first chapter thrilling (a God! A nursery rhyme right at the beginning! A world with Centaurs! :D A feast! Immortals! <3 Realles makes me want to know what is going to happen next. Poor Tantar, though. I really liked him.
The Táreds are - in lack of a better word - exciting. They convey that kind of wildness I wanted my Zirah'Nio to possess at certain times, but as yet could not make it clear through my writing.

(I had meant to post a reading-log I made while going through the story, but then my comp crashed and it was all lost. *pout*)

To not make this reply mindless praise, one thing I noticed on a few occasions: Show, not tell. That may just be me, but phrases like 'she pouted' or 'he blushed' could easily be replaced by a more detailed/original description - plus that will help you with the wordcount.

A big plus, though: Alternating between the two plots - what a striking contrast, on the one hand the dark freezing night, and on the other the palace's splendour during the feast. It made everything much more effective than it might have been if you had simply chosen to write in two linear chapters instead of interweaving them into one. Brilliantly done!

Other than that, it was a gorgeous read. :) Thank you for posting the chapter.

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Maybe you should simply take November as an incentive to write as much as you can still feel comfortable with, not necessarily 50,000 words.

Coming along well is overly enthusiastic. Just like you I am at a point of which I don't have the slightest clue how I got to it (the plot kept changing and going off in different directions than intended, grrr, and suddenly I was there) and neither do I know where to go from that point, because all of my MCs except Jebeni, who has undergone a great change I don't know about yet, are practically at a dead end: Kieriey is in a coma-like sleep while having an out of body experience with a man trapped in a blizzard, and Kianan is trapped *somewhere*. A dark room. Yay.

Oh well indeed. If you want to try and shut up that pesky inner editor, try a glass of red wine. It sure helped me reach 10,000 last night, and I also rediscovered a lot of vocabulary I thought I had forgotten.

Shutting up now. :p

[oloriel.livejournal.com]

*g* Gah, yes, I totally fail at facial expressions or more intelligent stuff to say in between conversations. I'll try to work on it in the coming chapters...
Glad you like most of it, though! I'm just afraid that I stuffed all the best stuff into the first chapters and things are going to get boring from now on.

Now, off to read your story post!

PS: The red wine, alas, doesn't help with the inner editor. On the contrary; wine of any sorts make the editor fall into a hyperactive frenzy of changing stuff around...

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

No wine then. ;)

As for the show, not tell, I found this website (http://www.writedesignonline.com/assignments/shownottell.html), trivial as it may seem when you take a look, very helpful because it showed some examples on how to accomplish just that particular thing. :) Made things much easier for me. - and the I totally fail at facial expressions or more intelligent stuff to say in between conversations is partly fault of all those online RPGs because in that context telling is absolutely acceptable. So not talking about Gondolin, no no no, bad LE.

Negative vibes - nu-uh. Not good at all. I'm sure (although you are writing with a predefined plot) many exciting things will come up. The impending conflict is bound to be interesting. :) Must be because you have an idea what is happening and the reader does not.

Now, off to read your story post!
No reply yet, so I hope it didn't suck too badly. ;)

[oloriel.livejournal.com]

The predefined plot thing died, actually. I originally meant to give a story I wrote in that world a long time ago another chance, but that was more of an urban fantasy thing. When I started to write it, it suddenly told me that it rather wanted to be something in the far history of that world, from which I had nothing but a few very vague ideas and even fewer names. Alas. So actually, I know barely more than the reader.

No, it didn't! I just didn't get around to reply yet, sorry. The fridge wanted to be cleaned. :P

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Barely knowing more than the reader when you are the writer is interesting, too. Speaking from experience, because weird as my story may be, it is keeping me mesmerized... and if my mind can keep me interested by presenting me new ideas, I'm sure yours is capable of that just as well. :)

Ah, I see. Reassuring LE now, are we? ;) But that's good to know, at least.

[vashachu.livejournal.com]

I added livingshapes, please add me back! I probably won't get through 16 pages right away, but I'll try! :)

[oloriel.livejournal.com]

Done! *hugs*